Question For Lost Tales Readers

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As you know, I tend to write in the first person point of view. I also tend to have 2-3 main characters that can take the “I” position. I try to make who ever is the “I” character obvious in the first paragraph of the new chapter. The feedback I get on this is a bit mixed.

One group of readers state they would prefer I put the name of the “I” character as the heading of the chapter. Seems that this group tends to have a higher occurrence of YA readers then the other group, but sample size is not big enough to validate that observation.

The second group tells me that is unnecessary and my transitions are normally well done and easy to follow.

So my question for all of you is this… assuming a couple-few main characters do you prefer the “I” character be placed in the chapter heading or handled by the text of the story itself? Something like “Chapter 1 : Vydor.” Of course the third person chapters might be a bit trickier. Might do something like “Chapter 99: The Old Man” or “Chapter 15: The Seven”

Reply in the comments and let me know what you think! 🙂 I am thinking about adjusting Volume 4 based on this feedback. So please speak up!

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11 thoughts on “Question For Lost Tales Readers

  1. Loey

    I think it’s clear by paragraph two or three. In volume 1 it took me a little longer to get it but by the third chapter using the “I” I got it. It’s also a mark of your style and most great writers ave a mark or style that fans can see and say “oh that’s from the Lost Tales.” I say keep the “I” in.


    1. Vincent Post author

      I have posted this same question in a forum that is catered to readers of ebooks in general, and they seem to be pushing for the name of the “I” character in the chapter header. So I am considering doing this. It really should not change the story at all, but will apparently help some people.

  2. Jillian

    I have read all three books multiple times and I read them on a Kindle i have no problem following who you have speaking in the first person with out you saying who it is. I think its better this way because it makes you pay attention to the story more. By the end of the first paragraph i always know who it is speaking. I actually just finished re-reading the books and don’t think you should change the chapter headings to specify who is speaking, I think it is part of the fun of reading your books.

    1. Vincent Post author


      Thanks for your thoughts!

      To be clear, are you saying you think it would hurt the book to add them?

      Thanks again!

      1. Jillian

        yes i think it would, it will take some of the mystery out of it, i like having to figure out who is telling their point of view, then again i’m probably older than your normal age-group for this series, i’m an avid reader and i like the waay you write and the layout for the chapters, especially how in book 2 you have the 6 magi hidden away talking around the bowl, it really piqued my interest when i didnt know what was going on the first time you did a chapter on them and i liked not knowing when they were going to pop back up again, and if the chapters were labeled it would take some fun away

  3. Loey

    I don’t think the name of the character should be the heading of the chapter I think Jillian is right about it when she says:”I think it is part of the fun of reading your books”.


  4. Jim Hendricks

    I too enjoy the discovery of who “I” is and so far have had no problem in the identification.

    As for putting it in a chapter title, it would take away that discovery but there is so much more to enjoy in the series that I would think it’s more important to cater to the larger part of your readership. If it pans out this is desired by the YA crowd and you have targeted to some extent YA, then chapter titles would be best.

  5. Kristi (Vincent's wife)

    I just want to thank all of you so much for your feedback. Since I know Vincent so well, it is difficult for me to be objective about what other readers may experience and see. So your comments are incredibly helpful. Thank you for taking the time to post them! 🙂

    1. Loey

      Hi Kristi,

      It’s a pleasure to hear from “the woman behind the man” (more accurately “the woman next to the man”). My husband wrote a book years ago and it took him years to finish it. I was the pre-reader and the editor. He submitted it to publishers and got positive feedback but they wanted him to totally rewrite the book. That book was his heart & soul. He self published it but stopped writing after that. Please don’t ever let Vincent throw in the towel. He is amazingly talented and it’s an honor to pre-read for both of you. As for being objective I understand. Vincent is very complimentary when he writes about you and he beams over Tim. If there’s ever anything else I can do for you please let me know and I’ll be happy to lend a hand. Have a magical holiday season filled with love.


  6. Vincent Post author

    So based on feed back from various sites I put them in the chapter headers for volume four… but after few days I pulled them back out. I personally did not like them. Made the book feel to juvenile if that makes sense.

    So they are staying gone. 🙂

  7. Derek

    Sorry I missed this thread, I am however glad for the outcome. Putting the names on the header just seems to take away some of the mystery. With several groups with similar characteristics it seems like part of the story that you have to work out for yourself, exactly who is up to what. As far as the switching between main characters, its only a moment or two before you realize who the main character for the chapter is. Cant wait to read 4!

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